PAGE 01 (four panels)
PANEL 1Wide panel showing the gigantic hall of an ancient forgotten temple. The temple has obviously been abandoned for a long time: there are cracks on the walls and some plants growing inside, with vines climbing on columns and statues. Looking around in awe, are two adventurers (DINIAN and MIKAYLA) who just walked into the hall. They appear very small compared to the surroundings.
Title and credits would go here.
DINIAN: WOW! LOOK AT THIS PLACE!
MIKAYLA: YEAH! IMPRESSIVE!
PANEL 2Close up on DINIAN who’s looking up at the ceiling, impressed, as she keeps walking. She’s not looking where she’s going. A pillar with a statuette on top is partially shown in front of her.
DINIAN: I WONDER HOW THEY BUIL…
PANEL 3Continuing from the previous panel. DINIAN bumps into the pillar accidentally tilting off the statuette. She looks in horror as the fragile statuette is about to fall.
PANEL 4DINIAN reaches forward to grab the statuette before it smashes on the ground. The statuette is bouncing off her hands a few times as she tries to grab a hold of it.
DINIAN: ACK! ACK! ACK! ACK!
----------PAGE 02 (six panels)
PANEL 1Close up on DINIAN as she finally catches the statuette.
DINIAN: GOTCHA!
PANEL 2DINIAN is still in the same position as in the previous panel, leaning forward and with the statuette firmly in her hands. She looks up with an awkward smile at MIKAYLA. MIKAYLA is staring at DINIAN with a scolding glare.
PANEL 3Close up on MIKAYLA, visibly annoyed and upset.
MIKAYLA: CAN’T YOU BE MORE CAREFUL?
PANEL 4Continuing from the previous panel. Close up on MIKAYLA lecturing DINIAN. As she talks, she gently pats a large stone statue that decorates the temple.
MIKAYLA: THIS PLACE SURVIVED INTACT FOR HUNDREDS OF YEARS AND NOW YOU…
PANEL 5
MIKAYLA turns to the statue as she notices it’s beginning to lean off balance.
MIKAYLA: UH OH!
PANEL 6Large view. Camera angle looking from the bottom up, with the two main characters partially in the foreground. The statue is slamming into a tall column which breaks in two and threatens to fall over the adventurers’ head.
DINIAN: MOVE!!!
----------PAGE 03 (five panels)
PANEL 1The duo dives out of the way as the column crashes on the ground.
PANEL 2The two characters are slowly beginning to pull themselves up. DINIAN shoots a glare at MIKAYLA.
PANEL 3Close up on DINIAN and MIKAYLA. They’re not back on their feet yet. DINIAN expression gives away that her tone is sarcastic. MIKAYLA simply looks speechless.
DINIAN: SOOOO… YOU WERE JUST SAYING!?
PANEL 4Same angle at the previous panel and characters in the same position. Both MIKAYLA and DINIAN worriedly turn their attention to the rumbling sound that suddenly surrounds them. Some dust and small rocks are falling down from the ceiling.
SFX: RRRUUUUUUUUMMMMBLE
PANEL 5Wide panel. DINIAN and MIKAYLA hurry up on their feet and start to run. The floor starts to crumble into a bottomless pit beneath and larger rocks fall from the ceiling.
DINIAN: OH CRAP!
MIKAYLA: RUN!!
----------PAGE 04 (three panels)
PANEL 1Wide panel of the two character running for their lives as the place is collapsing around them. Action poses and terrified looks on their faces. In this panel most of the collapse is behind them and the two characters are sprinting as fast as they can.
PANEL 2Wide panel of the two character running for their lives as the place is collapsing around them. Action poses and terrified looks on their faces. In this panel they dodge large rocks falling between them and/or they duck under statues that are falling over their head.
PANEL 3Wide panel of the two character running for their lives as the place is collapsing around them. Action poses and terrified looks on their faces. In this panel there’s debris even ahead of them. They vault over a fallen column while the rest of the place is coming down.
----------PAGE 05 (four panels)
PANEL 1External view of the doorway that leads into the temple (and a large stairway leading up to it). It’s mostly intact despite some bits and pieces falling apart.
PANEL 2Same view as before. The doorway crumbles down just as DINIAN and MIKAYLA shoot themselves out of it.
PANEL 3Wide panel. DINIAN and MIKAYLA are rolling down the stairs that lead to the temple’s entrance. Behind them, the whole temple is nearly completely destroyed. Only the last few pieces are still standing.
PANEL 4DINIAN and MIKAYLA hit the ground as they land at the feet of the temple’s stairway. They’re sore and bruised, but uninjured.
DINIAN: OW!
MIKAYLA: UGH!
----------PAGE 06 (four panels)
PANEL 1DINIAN gets up on her feet, dusting off her clothes.
DINIAN: HELL! THAT WAS WAY TOO CLOSE!
PANEL 2DINIAN helps MIKAYLA up. MIKAYLA’s attention is all focused on the rubble, looking in disbelief at the completely destroyed temple.
PANEL 3Wide panels. Camera behind DINIAN and MIKAYLA. They’re standing up and staring at the big pile of rubble. Dramatic lighting with the characters being more in the shadow.
PANEL 4Close up on the two characters’ faces. They both look sad. MIKAYLA puts a hand on DINIAN’s shoulder as sign of complicity.
MIKAYLA: IF ANYONE ASKS…
DINIAN: …WE’VE NEVER BEEN HERE. I KNOW.
Ruin by @Jops556 (Jops)
Old script for a short comic I wrote a while ago.
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