I never seem to get the shade of the tanned skin consistent. I've found that it really, really helps to find a light tan-colored pencil for that sort of thing...that way, you can just press as you normally would, and the color will always be consistent. Or you could get a brown watercolor pencil, color very lightly, and then go over it with a wet paintbrush (it's easier to lighten things that way, or at least easier than it is with a regular colored pencil...and the color comes out really smooth), but that has the disdvantage of requiring watercolor paper. Computer paper and watercolors really don't mix, and I can speak from experience on that one. >_<

I really like the color of the blanket in this...it looks vibrant, but inviting. And good job on Thief-Bakura's torso! But his feet look a little, um, noodly...they look appropriately limp for an unconscious guy, but there isn't much in the way of heel of ankle to them. If you just narrowed the leg above the foot in the back a little, it should take care of things (but, yee, you gave him toenails!).

I really like the expressions (as usual), especially Bakura's and Malik's...and I especially like the way you've drawn Malik's hair, here. It looks a little more...plausible than it does in the series, and managing to make Yuugiou characters' hair looks plausible is always impressive. The chain on his shirt is also very nicely detailed.