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Shun (Naruto OC)
Shun (Naruto OC) by @marven4lyf

An old drawing of my Naruto OC Shun Uzumaki. Drawn on paper, colored/cleaned up digitally.

Shun used to be one of my most developed OCs, but unfortunately all of my writings about him are lost. He was mostly developed as a roleplay character. I will have to use what I remember about him to rewrite his backstory, what I have in his character bio so far is what I remember. He is important to Shouya's story but I need to redevelop him.

I also just really like the Uzumaki clan.

Shun Uzumaki © 2019 marven4lyf

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Posted: Sunday, 05 May, 2024 @ 01:58 AM

I love this so much, it has that colored manga look that I've come to really like. And its good to see an Uzumaki oc, too. I'll be waiting to see what you have in store for them.

Posted: Sunday, 05 May, 2024 @ 02:11 AM

@lua0: Thank you sm :D Uzumaki OCs are probably my favorite. I find it disappointing that their clan and village only get a passing mention in the series (despite the main character being from the clan) So the fans gotta make up for it.

Posted: Tuesday, 07 May, 2024 @ 02:13 PM

@marven4lyf: Yeah, no kidding. That happens a lot with Naruto, things that aren't mentioned again (like that insanely OP crystal ball the Hiruzen was using at the beginning, Sakura ever using Genjutsu, how there were a bajillion ninja at the end of the manga since the chuunin exams went through people like rice paper...] And it really IS a shame we don't know more about the Uzumaki especially. You'd think we could at least get one chapter, or heck, maybe 4-7 more panels about them. I feel the same about the Fuma clan (not the filler one but I dont dislike them either). They were suppose to be closely related to Uchiha and even Pain's body uses one but we know almost nothing about them outside of that.

Posted: Tuesday, 07 May, 2024 @ 06:08 PM

@lua0: there is so much wrong with the series, especially noticable in the late series when it became the Uchiha show. That's why Idk if I'll bother watching Shippuden this time around, but I think it'll be worth it up until the Pain arc. Also disappointed with Sakura's character development but for some reason she doesn't frustrate me as much as she did on the first watch. Naruto could have been so good if other clans and ideas were expanded upon instead of forgotten

Posted: Tuesday, 07 May, 2024 @ 06:11 PM

@lua0: Damn my comment got cut off for some reason. I wanted to say I read Wani's profile and must say it's pretty sad ;_; Welcome to the bad dad club (and bad mom club)

Posted: Thursday, 09 May, 2024 @ 03:21 AM

@marven4lyf: Sadly my first comment couldn't save, darn. But I agree with you so much. The prevalence of the Uchiha was pretty obvious. I really do think that the writer focused way too much on giving the Sharingan so many insane powers, even compared to the tailed beasts. Re-writing reality, time sand space manipulations - those types of powers have a significantly higher power to them in my opinion. Not to mention genjutsu, sadly one of my favorite things in the show, is inanely under powered with so many ways for someone to get 'out of it' to being completely invalidated by Uchiha entirely. And then the ending was just...I'm not sure what was going on. I have also only glimpsed passively at Boruto and it feels like a completely different series. Naruto had some sort of identity crisis. Even so, I still really like Naruto and the setting. It's so much fun to come up with my own head canons and characters for it. Kishimoto really had something significant and fresh. It's just too bad it couldn't shine even brighter with all the plot holes and writing issues.

I second that about Sakura. I do really like her, it's just a shame she later plays back seat with the two main characters, even to the point Naruto just starts to heal people instantly with sage mode. I'm not sure why Kishimoto does this. Konan, Chiyo, and Termari are female characters that stand out to me as being the best well written and they don't even have half as much screen time.

And thank you for reading! I hope it was enjoyable, although I am not done with her bio quite yet. Her inspiration was essentially first me thinking about what a serial killer in the Naruto universe would be like who wanted a more low-profile to keep their killing spree up without resorting to joining the Akatsuki. I also thought about how it would be to replace the jinchuuriki archtype and make their demon the serial killer itself - their burden is a largely societal one. A story sorta untold.

Our poor ocs though! I intend to have Wani eventually have happiness! I just tend to take things really slow burn.

Sorry for the massive comment though, haha. I just don't usually get to 'nerd out' to these things.

Posted: Thursday, 09 May, 2024 @ 12:48 PM

@lua0: There are a ton of issues and honestly it's more fun to treat the settings and characters like a big DnD campaign. The sharingan was cool in the beginning but became way too op and focused on that i just couldn't care anymore. I and I get that some may find that part interesting and cool but for me I just would rather see what the other characters are doing, even more mission arcs with team 7 together would have been nice.

Her inspiration was essentially first me thinking about what a serial killer in the Naruto universe would be like who wanted a more low-profile to keep their killing spree up without resorting to joining the Akatsuki.

I like this idea, it feels realistic to the universe. No one really talks about the lack of therapists or how violent behavior is rampant. It's different to see someone trying to retain a normal Shinobi life while secretly being a merciless killer. Who would have known that a warfaring society built on the backs of child soldiers would turn out to have major consequences!

It's sad Wani has to deal with knowing her father was that kind of person, and I would love to see her accept herself despite her family's past. And I like the long comments so don't worry about it xD

Posted: Thursday, 09 May, 2024 @ 01:16 PM

@lua0:

I also thought about how it would be to replace the jinchuuriki archtype and make their demon the serial killer itself - their burden is a largely societal one. A story sorta untold.

This reminds me that I haven't yet decided if I want Shouya's status as a jinchuuriki to be known to the Suna public. I'm trying to ask myself "what would Rasa do?" If it were hidden, then as far as the public is concerned, if Gaara is dead, then Shukaku must be back in the tea kettle. This would allow Shouya to make friends and live a somewhat more normal life than Gaara, but I somehow believe it won't be that easy.

Posted: Friday, 10 May, 2024 @ 11:21 PM

@marven4lyf: Yeah I agree. I really loved the other characters and would have liked to see them do their own stuff too. I also wanted more world building since the world is actually really fascinating. The mix between older time periods and a sort of grounded futuristic bit of technology was pretty seamless. That, and expand on the afterlife, deities, religions, and creatures too. Normally I don't get too in-depth with world building in interest because usually it's not too much different from one another, but for some reason my brain thought the Naruto setting was just brilliant and new. There are only so many times I can see a medieval fantasy or even some sci-fis over and over.

I like this idea, it feels realistic to the universe. No one really talks about the lack of therapists or how violent behavior is rampant. It's different to see someone trying to retain a normal Shinobi life while secretly being a merciless killer. Who would have known that a warfaring society built on the backs of child soldiers would turn out to have major consequences!

It's sad Wani has to deal with knowing her father was that kind of person, and I would love to see her accept herself despite her family's past. And I like the long comments so don't worry about it xD

Exactly what I was thinking! I haven't decided which village Wani's father actually comes from though since he's a transient messenger-nin of sorts. I'm guessing maybe the Hidden Village in the Grass since they are all about that diplomatic approach (..and seem to be constantly involved with Orochimaru intentionally?). I also thought of the Cloud but well, they were pretty emboldened ninja so I don't think they would trust them to send messages back and forth. I'm actually thinking he could be from the Leaf! There are actually many ninja employed to do all sorts of different things besides just a squad to do ranked missions. In fact, he could have been a ninja adept at deciphering scrolls too. It would make sense since he was responsible for getting messages across. However, the Village in Hot Water has a very interesting pretense besides just being the village Hidan came from. A resort like town who routinely may ask other villages to assist on matters, prioritizes a smaller force of ninja to only keep the peace for their tourist endeavors. A great place to brush up on social skills, learn the travel traffic, and have an excuse to being a ninja who is employed as a special courier.

I hope to see it too! I don't know how her development will turn out though, I don't even know if I'll just have it implied to her profile or actually write a fanfiction, sense I'm unsure how her story would go in a roleplay.

This reminds me that I haven't yet decided if I want Shouya's status as a jinchuuriki to be known to the Suna public. I'm trying to ask myself "what would Rasa do?" If it were hidden, then as far as the public is concerned, if Gaara is dead, then Shukaku must be back in the tea kettle. This would allow Shouya to make friends and live a somewhat more normal life than Gaara, but I somehow believe it won't be that easy.

That's a good question. It would seem to me that most villagers won't really know the status of the vessels in which the tailed-beasts are kept under. The jinchuuriki themselves are rather mysterious individuals, with a trend of villages erring on the side of secrecy to the point of making it a punishable offense by even mere mentions of someone being one (Naruto/Kohona's approach). There is a pattern of them being ostracized out of fear of course too. I think it is honestly up to you, and to be frank, Rasa would have a lot of ways of going about to make sure things were kept under wraps. If I may, you could tweak the sealing jutsu if you wanted to into something interesting. Of course, this means you will have to divert from the canon story, but I think it makes for a fantastic approach since Shouya's development is intrinsic to Gara's. I actually thought about the Death Reaper Seal could partially seal someone as we've seen during the fight between Hiruzen and Orochimaru. Now, what if there was some sort of secret, powerful jutsu that could somehow split Shukaku's spirit into two parts? You could say this endeavor was extremely risky - for one, Gara could retaliate, the massive amount of manpower to preform such a feat, and the jutsu somehow going wrong. The upsides are though the village has the manpower, chakra, and arguably the minds to make such a thing possible (As we have seen with Chiyo developing the life-saving jutsu she did.) One half could reside within Shouya, and the other half still within Gara. The two would likely be linked, and maybe could spark a different road to character development than what was only seen in the canon version. You could probably even keep most of the canonized events, even going so far as to say that, despite the Akatsuki extracting Gara, a good portion of Shukaku resided within him still, and grew independently of it. There is so much you could do with it though! Gara having to be sacrificed in order for Shouya to be a new host is already a fun premise.

Posted: Saturday, 11 May, 2024 @ 01:25 AM

I do enjoy the world building a lot. One thing I've always thought about were how all the different cultures developed, since the great ninja nations all seem similar but distinct from each other. And you seem to understand the different villages cultures and approach to diplomacy really well, I may check this comment a lot for reference, as my memory is not that great when it comes to stuff. Having to organize too many things in my head >_< Im trying to pay extra close attention to details like that on my current rewatch. There's a good reason for Wani's dad to be from the Leaf with their various jobs. And Hot Water would also be interesting. Would it have made him more social/charming if he had been from there?

I hope to see it too! I don't know how her development will turn out though, I don't even know if I'll just have it implied to her profile or actually write a fanfiction, sense I'm unsure how her story would go in a roleplay.

My approach has always been imagining a main story for the OC and developing it, but also staying open to different outcomes of their story. Like games that have good and bad routes, every situation you can throw at them is a chance for some kind of development. And by putting them through lots of situations you can watch them grow. And I think anything like doodling or fanfiction or even just writing captions with fragments of their story along with an art piece related to it. I know a popular thing for Naruto OC creators to do is make fake screenshots and expand upon the context in the description. If youre ever curious on how things could go in a roleplay, Im a little rusty since i havent done any long term rps in a while, but I'd be down if you are!

That's a good question. It would seem to me that most villagers won't really know the status of the vessels in which the tailed-beasts are kept under. The jinchuuriki themselves are rather mysterious individuals, with a trend of villages erring on the side of secrecy to the point of making it a punishable offense by even mere mentions of someone being one (Naruto/Kohona's approach). There is a pattern of them being ostracized out of fear of course too. I think it is honestly up to you, and to be frank, Rasa would have a lot of ways of going about to make sure things were kept under wraps. If I may, you could tweak the sealing jutsu if you wanted to into something interesting. Of course, this means you will have to divert from the canon story, but I think it makes for a fantastic approach since Shouya's development is intrinsic to Gara's. I actually thought about the Death Reaper Seal could partially seal someone as we've seen during the fight between Hiruzen and Orochimaru. Now, what if there was some sort of secret, powerful jutsu that could somehow split Shukaku's spirit into two parts? You could say this endeavor was extremely risky - for one, Gara could retaliate, the massive amount of manpower to preform such a feat, and the jutsu somehow going wrong. The upsides are though the village has the manpower, chakra, and arguably the minds to make such a thing possible (As we have seen with Chiyo developing the life-saving jutsu she did.) One half could reside within Shouya, and the other half still within Gara. The two would likely be linked, and maybe could spark a different road to character development than what was only seen in the canon version. You could probably even keep most of the canonized events, even going so far as to say that, despite the Akatsuki extracting Gara, a good portion of Shukaku resided within him still, and grew independently of it. There is so much you could do with it though! Gara having to be sacrificed in order for Shouya to be a new host is already a fun premise.

I love the idea of Gaara and Shouya sharing Shukaku. When it comes to Gaara retaliating, so far in my "main story" Gaara had made a plan to leave the village as extraction day approached (not that anyone told him when it was but hes a ninja so can just figure it out himself), he hoped that by disappearing, both he and Shouya could live. Even though he knew he would be a fugitive on the run forever, but Shouya could at least live without the burden of being Shukaku's host. Unfortunately he didn't get very far, because Rasa also knew he was planning to leave and met him outside the village to fight him. Gaara's sand is no match for gold dust. He is beaten to near unconsciousness and brought back home so the extraction/sealing ritual could take place, the one that Shun has been training for since he was taken under the Kazekage's wing. I know I still have to write Shun's story, but here he was chosen as the perfect person for the job because Lady Chiyo did not want to help Rasa anymore. His clan already specializing in fuinjutsu as well as his large chakra reserves made a good match for the project.

If the beast was split into both hosts and they both survived, let me think... Gaara and Shouya only have a few years to learn to get along in the main story, so if they now got to grow up together, its possible that Gaara will have learned to let people into his life and his violent tendencies would have chilled out before he arrives to the chunin exams. Im not sure how Rasa would react to this but I guess it depends on if he intended for them to both survive. If he didn't intend for it to happen, maybe watching them heal together as Gaara now has someone who shares his specific burden, will be key to Rasa's character development when he realizes that trying to isolate and control his children's relationships may lead to undesirable outcomes and he should change his parenting method. but yeah I love the ideas you've presented! It took forever for me to type this since I have focusing troubles, but I hope I've communicated my ideas clear enough ^^

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