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DYOS 10.5: Plans Within Plans

Raiders Incoming
Raiders Incoming by @Thorvald (El Thorvaldo)

My sixth submission to DYOS X.ii. [link]

I'm not happy with the dialogue in this. I was working from a script provided by @GenMarshall, and while I tweaked a couple of lines, it was basically unaltered from what he gave me. The lines in the last couple of panels just seem like a jumble of random statements.

CivGeneral © @GenMarshall;
Samus Aran © Nintendo;
Sid Meier's Alpha Centauri © Firaxis Games;
Spongebob © Stephen Hillenburg;
Thorvald & Sadao © me.

[Originally submitted to DeviantArt February 2012.]


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